Another "Poem By Tom" ( FINISHED )  

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Ok I am now able to finish typing it up. This is a poem I wrote awhile ago 02/15/08.

This is about when you were young and every thing is adventures and big. tell me what y'all think.


There in the forest with trees so tall;
there lies an ancient shattered hall.

Are these the halls of ancient kings,
with jeweled, crowns and golden rings.

or are these the halls of dwarves of old,
With weapons fierce, and hoards of gold.

Or are these the houses of elven lords,
who are rich with song, and poetic words!

but perhaps, these are the dungeons that of evil wreak;
Where creatures of evil, and darkness sleep.

(sigh) Really its not but stone from houses old,
none weapons beautiful, or treasured gold.


something funny is that, people I have showed this to, thought I was showing them something I found in one of Tolkiens books =) I aint that good, lol

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3 comments

It does sound like Tolkien, though; simple but graceful rhyme, with an appropriate subject! Bravo once again!

August 1, 2009 at 4:13 PM

Oooohh...I like that!

August 2, 2009 at 4:18 PM

Let's see:

a) "dwarves" does sound like Tolkien, ordinary plural being at least before his time dwarfs;

b) "jeweled, crowns" does not, he did not, neither did his contemporaries, put comma between adjectiv and its noun;

c) "the dungeons that of evil wreak" does not, he would either have written the dungeons that of evil reek like reek of putrition or the dungeons that evil wreak adding upon ... in the next line, just as wreak havoc on an idyll: he knew to distinguish between these two homophones.

In Swedish wreak has a cognate vräka (meaning ruin or evict) and reek has a cognate röka (meaning smoke) as well as ryka (also smoke, but passively: you "röker" fish, but smouldering ashes tend to "ryka"). Icelandic I know not exact spellings of, probably closer to English.

October 8, 2010 at 9:30 AM

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